|1.||Maybe there are still too many scenes. The play gives the effect of being about a building, not the people in it.|
|2.||None of the characters is central. We don't get inside any of them. And none of them changes enough during the play to make a turning point in the plot.|
|3.||The big scene which we wait for is not a discussion of the issue which the play raises. We watch a castigation of a spoiled rich woman by an educated Mrs. Warren. 2 And since the expected argument is evaded the play is left without a meaning.|
|4.||The worst trouble is that I can't find your main character. If it's Mrs. Montchauvet shouldn't the story begin with her and revolve around her? If it's the doctor shouldn't he be more than a spectator? If it's Bronny shouldn't he be a virgin when the curtain goes up?|
|5.||Shouldn't the whole discussion be in a lighter vein? More like a Restoration comedy?|
Forgive me if I'm making wild suggestions. I think the problem is soluble but not quite solved. The characters somehow don't get a chance to affect each other. They ricochet off each other, and sometimes strike sparks, but go on just as they were.